This week’s snippet is from from a WIP novella, Dark Paradise. Set in the early 60′s, it’s about the relationship between two teens, good girl Celly and reformed bad boy Duke.
Last week, Celly’s friend Mona came over to try to convince her to go to the county fair. This excerpt picks up where that one left off.
An hour and a half later, Mona and Celly are at the fairground gates. Celly hugs her arms around herself, trying to blend into the wrought iron fence separating them from paying customers, while Mona hops up and down, arms flailing, trying to flag down friends.
Alice joins them with her boyfriend George. Her skirt is a good six inches above her knees, her blouse low enough to show cleavage. She looks stunning in comparison to Celly’s plain slacks.
Alice and Mona hug and kiss each other’s cheeks. Alice chirps about her difficulties in leaving the house, until “Celly’s here too.” Mona jerks her thumb in Celly’s direction.
Alice pauses, nods at Celly, and then goes back to her story; Celly wishes she could melt through the fence.
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Poor Celly. We’ve all been there, I think. You do a great job of portraying her discomfort. Hope her day improves soon!
Excellent depiction of an awkward situation for poor Celly. I hope things improve for her at the Fair. Great snippet!
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