This month I’m posting excerpts from my short story collection The Futility of Loving a Soldier. This week is a continuation of Lindy’s story in “Crash.” She’s just returned from combat and her dad isn’t sure how to react.
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“Honey—”
“I said I don’t want to talk about it!”
She stood up abruptly, and Bill took an involuntary step back. She’d always been small, but she’d lost weight since her return; her eyes stared out from dark sockets in a too-angular face, framed by limp hair. They caught something in his expression and narrowed, and she pushed past him and out of the room.
A moment later, the front door slammed.
Bill sighed. At least she’d left the house.
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Perfect description of someone suffering and the last sentence was totally great!
At least she’d left the house… and now he had a whole new package of worries to deal with. Such pointed detail in the descriptions.
Tough situation, I feel for both of them. Very well done excerpt!
Fantastic descriptions that add to the drama of the scene as well as the characterization. I could feel the tension in the air, and his relief at her exit. More drama to follow…