New year, new story! This month I’ll be pulling from a novella series I’m working on, with each book based on a different fairy tale. Today’s snippet is from the first one (no title yet), which is a retelling of Beauty and the Beast.
MC Nyah lives with her younger sister Payton. They’d been joking around about Nyah’s betrothed and who Payton would marry.
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Payton burst back into the cottage, her eyes wide, and said, “Nyah, you must see this!”
I hurried out after her.
She stood in our small yard and pointed towards the horizon, where a large cloud of dust hung over the hills, then asked, “What is that?”
I shook my head and said, “It’s too distant to see. Quick, fetch Father’s spyglass.”
She ran into the house and returned a moment later with the object.
I held it to my eye and trained it on the cloud, revealing a large band of men on horses. My heart leapt into my mouth; our small village would be no match for these men.
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It just so happens, that Beauty and the Beast is one of my favorite fairytales, and based on this snippet, you’re going to do the tale justice. It’s a great start. (I’m not participating this week, just hopping around)
What a cool idea for a series! Great beginning to this story.
Ohh, what a scary scenario! You did a great job flipping from the sisters teasing each other about men to being in a situation that could be deadly. Great 8.
Trouble afoot and what a great idea for a story. More, I want more.
The part that ye old romances never mentioned, rowdy knights out for some plunder and pleasure.
Uh oh, now I’m worried about them! I love retellings of Beauty and the Beast so I’m thoroughly hooked….great snippet! More, please :-)
Oh dear! I don’t suppose those men are coming to throw a party.
Ahhh! Not good not good!
I love the idea of a “spyglass.” I need one. Now. *off to etsy I go*
Thanks for the great 8!