Weekend Writing Warriors 6/23 #8sunday

Today’s excerpt is again from a five-part story I’m working on. Joop, an immigrant to America, is remembering his last night in Belgium, saying goodbye to the woman he loves, Suzanne. In this scene, she’s trying to convince him to stay.

A single tear trickled down her cheek as she said, “I’ll miss you. I need you here.”

Joop reached up and brushed her tear away with his thumb. What to say? They’d had this discussion dozens of times since he’d announced he was going to America.

Suzanne grabbed his hand and pressed her lips to his palm. “Hold onto this, Joop. Hold onto my love; we’ll be together again.

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  1. This is so sad, I really want to know more. I have so many questions.

  2. Very heart-touching scene. Wish Suzanne would/could go with him. Poor Joop. Nicely done, Ed.

  3. Aww, so touching! Heartbreaking, in fact. I can picture the scene easily. Thanks for sharing this part.

  4. A very emotional scene, makes me sad for both of them. But an excellent excerpt!

  5. This is so easy to picture. A lovely scene.

  6. Aww… This is so emotional and touching! I wonder why Suzanne didn’t go with him, though.

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